[FFML] [Naruto] Dead Garden - Chapter Eight: The Nine-Tailed Demon Fox

[Jared Waddell]

Okay, I'm all caught up, and I'm interested.

My only complaint in this chapter is Tetsu's motivation is nearly nonexistent. I do realize that between the secrecy of ninja and the temporary teamwork, there wasn't much space to supply motivation beyond a few lines of dialogue. Perhaps tipping off the reader to the motivations of the Cloud team just before their ambush of Team seven?

Anyway, otherwise good. I am looking forward to more.

~Rick Spiff

p.s. Chapter Nine: Tails... I'm going to have to use that one sometime. Thanks!  ^_^


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 From: Aaron Nowack <anowack at mimiru.net>
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Subject: [FFML] [Naruto] Dead Garden - Chapter Eight: The Nine-Tailed Demon Fox
 
Previous chapters available at:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7173680/1/Dead_Garden

Dead Garden
A Naruto Fanfic
By: Aaron Nowack

Chapter Eight: The Nine-Tailed Demon Fox

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Disclaimer:  Naruto belongs to Kishimoto Masashi, who apparently is not
actually me.  The actual text of this story belongs to Aaron Nowack, who
apparently actually is me.  The subjective experience existing only in
your mind when you read this story belongs to you, who is not me, unless
you are me, in which case... oh, forget it.
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        "Hello, me," the Nine-Tailed Demon Fox said with Sakura's voice,
and she smiled, revealing a mouth of sharp fangs.  "I was wondering when
we'd finally have a chance to chat."
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