But reality intruded, and the young couple, the train hand in hand,
and went up into the streets of New York towards the campus of the
university.

They carried the WHOLE TRAIN with them to the university? Wow.

The speaker nodded. "Yo, man, the Ghostbusters. Manhattan's dopest
crew. They make the charmed babes look like charmed bitches."

'Charmed' should be capitalised since it's a proper noun in this context.

"You will if you stay in New York long enough. My man's Garret runs

Lose the apostrophe.

"That door over there. Don't worry, his slime comes off fairly easily."

Yeah, especially when you can go intangible.

"I am six months pregnant, Peter Venkman!" Janine snapped, standing
up and planting both hands on the desk. The desk had hid her
pregnancy very well, Danny noted, and then realized maybe that had
been the point. "Six months! With twins! Do not tell me what I need
and don't need!" She exhaled noisely through clenched teeth and sat
back down in the chair.

Well, that explains the three-footer. I'm amazed she didn't eat Slimer out
of revenge.

So get part two of this out already. :P

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