"K'thardin" <kthardin@tenchifanart.com>	wrote:

Autobot City on Earth - One Year Later

It has been one year to the day since the devastating attack on Autobot
City on Earth by Decepticon
forces that took the lives of nearly two hundred of the US Military forces
and almost thirty
Autobots,

I think this would work better if you opened with a framing device, such
as a news reporter to give a context to work inside.

-- 
Henry J. Cobb
http://www.io.com/~hcobb/anime/


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