Gary's comments covered most everything. Here's mine.

<snip>

The target of this rather pitious moan quickly assumed a stance and

waited for his oponent to make a move of some sort.  It was not long 

at all before the zombie, with bits of zombe flaking off, began it's

attack.  "Ungggggggg!" it cried, and shuffled forward.  Ranma just
stared 

its
(look for this elsewhere; I won't belabor it by pointing out every
instance)

What is a 'zombe?' Parts of a zombie? If you meant 'zombie' instead of
'zombe' it sounds needlessly repetitive.

suggest: It was not long at all before the undead, with zombie bits
flaking off

<snip>

instead of shakespear, and wearing a kilt.  Everyone passed it off as

an unimportant Kuno development and it was never spoken of again.

Shakespeare
(though I think he only does that in the anime dubs)

Suggest: Shakespearian dialog

*shug* Elizabethain doesn't have the right ring to it.

Amusing story, though I'd drop the last couple of paragraphs and end it
at Mr.
Bones' disintegration -- I don't think the stuff after that really adds
much.

I kind of like the last few paragraphs, though I concede that the story
would be fine without them alltogether.

Amusing. And hopefully I've been helpful.

Later,
Rick "Busy" Spiff

FFML Member since 2000 A.D.
(Perhaps earlier; most of the last century's a bit hazy.)

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