Krista Fisk wrote:

*But,* he mused as he drifted off to sleep in the arms of the girl he 
loved
more than anything in the world, *at least I'm not alone...*

Not really much to say in the way of criticism.  It's a very nice what-if 
fic, and very plausible.  What a different series it would be if Shinichi
had told Ran the truth from the very beginning.  Are you planning to explore 
this scenario further by any chance?  It's perfect as a one-shot, but I 
confess, you've piqued my curiosity, and I'd like to see more.

You know, I've been straining to think how this scenario could be even 
nearly as interesting as the one in the actual series.  It makes things 
a lot easier for Shinichi in subsequent episodes and that's not a 
particularly good thing were the story to continue.  In order to make it 
work, the author would have to come up with a way in which the solution 
of this problem creates another complication.  Avoiding the rather 
unpleasant lemon possibilities, that's difficult to do.  About the best 
I could come up with is that instead of the dorky daddy becoming famous 
off the fruits of Conan's intellect, Ran does instead, because Conan 
just tells her the answer instead of going through the difficult 
roundabout methods of making it seem like the dork is figuring things 
out.  This somehow causes a problem.  I dunno maybe being overshadowed 
by his daughter causes his drinking problem to worsen instead of 
actually seeming to get better as his career improves.

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