JusenkyoGuide wrote:

Nan da hell? 

I'd love to hear the back story behind the idea of Kasumi taking a
blood oath. The writing was fairly smooth, and the internal monologue
a good touch, especially given Kasumi's iron control on her
expressions. 

Agreed.  This was the beginning of a *very* good story.  I got quite
interested in the situation, and I was really looking forward to some
flashback or whatnot that would let us in on the backstory.

Then it took a left turn at Alburquerque and slammed into a wall.

What happened?  Did the author just get sick of the story 12
paragraphs in?  If this was supposed to be a joke, it's not just
a bad one, it's a *stupid* one, without anything funny to
recommend it at all.  Why waste such a good setup on such an
abrupt and pointless finish?

-- Bob

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"Extricate the quadruped from the vehicle and constabulate him into something
nutritious, and the aurora shall rise in the heavens and I shall return and
compensate thee amply."  -- Backwards message at the end of "Crimson and
Clover" by Tommy James and the Shondells
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