JusenkyoGuide wrote:

    $A damned fine fic.  Seriously.  This was quite good.  I'm not a big 
SM fan,  but  I do enjoy it enough to at least scan those fics, and this 
one got me hooked fast.  Very clean writing, excellent dialogue.  
Normally I try to do a line by line commentary/error checking, but I had 
to give that up pretty quick.  For one thing, it's long.  For another, 
it's too serious, and really had me too emotionally involved to make 
cheap one liners.  For another, the occasional spelling and grammar 
mistake was SO occasional I didn't even spot one.  I'm sure there's some 
there, somewhere, but as I read I just kept getting drawn back into the 
same story I'd just read and glossing over the actual words.  Excellent 
fic, and kinda disturbing.  I didn't see any consistency errors, no 
really unrealistic situations.  It's just...  good.  I'd like to offer 
help, but I can't, all I can say is keep it up, it's working.

    Abortion can certainly be treated callously and cheaply, for a few 
low brow gags, and at least a quarter of the Lifetime channel wannabe 
script writers have given it a lick and a promise, but done well, and 
done seriously, with the tragic circumstance and genuine heartache and 
internal conflict you've shown here, it just reminds me how powerful it 
can be. 

    I can't say I really enjoyed this fic.  I'm glad I read it.  I'd 
recommend it to most people.  But it's hard to really say you enjoyed 
_anything_ that really wrenches at your heart like that.  I realize, of 
course, that it's just characters, but the point is you made me care 
about those characters within the story, not just as cherished anime 
characters in a fanfic.  Maybe I'm taking it too personally, I can't 
speak for other people.

    What I can say is, OMG, what is Usagi going to do?!  Seriously, is 
the future set in the time tunnel?  Does Usagi have the strength to 
forge her own future, one in which Chibi-Usa has a sibling?  Or does she 
succumb to the temptation, do what really might actually be best for 
her, and certainly what many things seem to hint at?  I suppose there IS 
a real possibility she keeps the child, but it's an abomination, so she 
and Mamoru keep it locked in the basement and feed it a bucket of fish 
heads once a week without telling anyone.  That might make a good omake. 

    Obviously, I want everything to turn out happily.  But, I have read 
enough of your fics to be aware of the possibility this ain't gonna be 
pretty.  Your call.  You've got my emotional mood in the palm of your 
hand, and you can tip it either way.  One thing for sure, I WILL be 
reading when you post the next part. 

    So when is it?


-Nugar




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