Michael A Chase wrote:

Suggested changes: {before : after}

Used them, like always.

"Which {give : gives} me a strong bargaining posture, eh? Killgore
winked conspiratorially at his personal assassin.

So they know what he's collecting.  Would Beanie Babies be evil enough?

You'll find out... soon. Outline says only 4 chapters left.

Killgore clapped his hands together with enthusiastic glee. "It'll be
like a second honeymoon."

Must have been an ... interesting honeymoon. :}b

Yes, and we won't get into it here.

backwater flyspeck it was before we came here, we can warn them about
what to expect in Zeiram. They'll keep their mouths shut, since
what's bad for us is fatal for them. If Anton is stupid enough to
come here, it'll all be over for him, not us."

Sounds like more Zeiram chow to me.

Perhaps we'll find out about this as well.

"I figured it best we don't know each other's everyday names.
{Culpable : Plausible} deniability is always a necessity in our line
of work."

I like the original better in some ways, but I think this is what you

meant.

Okay

That made Fujikuro laugh. "I ain't a taxi service."

Didn't he say that to Iria in the anime?

Yep. That was an intentional reference. I'll throw in something about Iria
treating him the same way.

Thanks for the C+C. It was most helpful.

DB Sommer



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