Michael A Chase wrote:

combining both responses

Finally found some time to write. The second part of his is written,
it's just a {question : quesition} of finding the time to revise it.
Hoping to do it either today or tomorrow, but this should be enough
for now.

Glad you were able to.

Same here.

Dane was dressed in a bright yellow and blue uniform with a number of
gray lines running up and down the arms and legs. The outfit was a
custom made Farrgan Frame, which ran the fine line between defense
and agility. It was composed of absorption mesh that absorbed kinetic
impacts to a large degree, making the wearer impervious to small arms
projectile fire. Whatever shock the mesh was incapable of cushioning,
it would distribute the remainder evenly throughout the wearer's
body, protecting him from all but the most {debilitating of injuries
: severe impacts}. Due to its skintight nature it afforded the wearer
a maximum of {movement : mobility}.

yeah, better word choices all around.

smaller items at different parts of the body. But they were nothing

compared to the weapons pod that had replaced his right hand. A
number of different weapons, from lasers to masers to projectiles,
were concealed in the extraordinarily versatile attachment that cost
more than a standard battle tank. About the only thing Dane couldn't
do with it was scratch his nose.

Sounds like he could, but it would be rather dangerous.

Scratch the whole nose off, perhaps, but not scratch it normally. :)

pre-assigned routes until they locate Zeiram. He {won't : will} be
hard to miss. He's big, green, has a head shaped like a giant
mushroom, and will be trying to kill everything that comes into his
line of sight."

Any distinguishing characteristics? :}b

Bad breath and an ingrown toenail too.

"That has got to be one of the nastiest divorces ever," Yuri
whispered to her partner. Kei could only nod in response.

Amen.  At least on Iria's side.

Yeah, she really held shooting her new protege against him, among other
things.

"Yeah, right," Yuri said drolly as Kei recovered her weapon and the
two exited the room.

Kei's gun was crushed.  Is she planning on throwing it?

Oops. I'll axe that.

 > > Pain was the same as any other feeling. Nothing more than a warning

sign. You could feel hot. You could feel cold. You could either
choose to acknowledge it and react {acc ordingly : accordingly}, or
ignore it and move on until the body overloaded and collapsed. He'd
swallow an {anti- :}coagulant after the fight, when he had the time.

Unless he _wants_ to bleed out.

Oops. yep

"Good." Killgore spat once more on Dane's corpse and headed for the
nearest exit. It was time to get some answers and solve some {stick :
sticky} situations that had come up in one fell swoop.

Now Whisper won't get her mausoleum.

Yep. I'd say it's tragic, but she did kill people for a living, and wasn't
picky about it.

Thanks for the comments. They are really apprecaited.

DB Sommer

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