I also really enjoyed this chapter.  There really is only one main problem
I had and that is your use of quotation marks to render thought.  It got
particularly confusing when in a single paragraph there was both thought
and spoken words and I had to deturmine which was which.  I think you
would be better served to use single quotes '  ' or do away with them
entirely for thinking and notate it as it occurs for clarity's sake.


Kelly,
Skywise Skychan.

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