Adrian Tymes <wingcat@pacbell.net> writes:
Unobserved, an elderly man shorter than either
teenager eavesdropped on their conversation. He could
have sworn kids, especially girls, were not so open
about the topic; to discover otherwise sent joy
tingling down his spine.
Is that really the part that was tingling?
For a moment, he lost track of who was defending which
position, but it mattered not. In his opinion, the
discussion itself helped ensure Japan remained the
best country to live in, as reflected in his own
frequent measurements of one particular statistic.
Not that he often read foreign works unless in foreign
countries.
This last paragraph wandered away into incomprehensibility, it seems
to me. Was the foreign works a directed comment in particular? I think
it'd work better if you just drop the last sentence.