Gotta tell you, this chapter lacked whatever it was in the way of being
captivating that kept me reading the first nineteen.  I mean, it's
well-written as usual - minor glitches here and there, but oh well.
Anyways, I've read it twice and I don't know what it is or why it is, but I
could've seen Tenchi's number coming up (his Beta being taken out) even if
you put it in a lotto machine with a hundred other ping pong balls.

Also, this:

Note: the Beta Veritech's armament might be a bit different from what
some Robotech fans are accustomed to.  In this case, I deferred to the
judgement of one Stan Bundy, and his revisions to Robotech Mecha for the
RPG.  His site is located at http://www.users.kih.net/~sbundy/

This is, by my very unofficial count, the second or third time you've gone
off the reservation on facts in this fic.  The first I shrug off, because
everyone's allowed one, the second one becomes suspect.

But hey, I said it was well-written, so I wasn't completely turned off by
twenty.  Keep writing.  Don't let me get you down too much.
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 Would it be alright?  Could it be alright?"
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