And giving back what I get:

Who Witches the Watcher?

Nice play on words

One character inspired by another (rather obvious) source.

Contains major spoilers for the MTT OAVs; minor for the TV series.

Hmm. I saw the licensed stuff, and am uncertain which version I saw. Didn't
know there was a difference.

- - - - - - - - - -
Sae and Nanaka were sitting outside school eating lunch when they
saw him.  A bald, chubby, twenty-foot-tall humanoid wearing a
light blue toga drifted slowly down from the sky onto the grounds
of Kitanohashi High School.  He held his left arm bent at the
elbow, the forearm level with the ground.  A portion of his toga
was draped over his left forearm.  The intruder landed, then
turned his head slowly, calmly observing the students milling
around the grounds.  The students stared back.

Intruiging enough start.

Sae cowered behind Nanaka.  "Is it another alien?"

"Sae, I don't think that hiding behind me is going to do any
good," Nanaka began in an even tone, one eye twitching.

Cute.

The towering alien ignored Miyama, much to her displeasure.
Instead, he posed himself carefully, then, looking skyward,
started speaking.  Alert students noticed that his mouth movements
didn't match the perfect Tokyo-dialect Japanese they were hearing.

Bad dubbing. I know it well.

"I am... the Watcher.

Heh.

"Who is he talking about?" asked Sae nervously, clutching Nanaka
from behind and peering over her shoulder.

A vein pulsed in Nanaka's forehead.  She bowed her head slightly
and clenched her fists.  "Sae, you dunderhead," she hissed in a
whisper, "he's talking about you."

Watcher: Actually, I mean Akane.

Nanaka: Oh, nevermind, then.

"Oh, a new alien?" came a new voice.

'another alien' perhaps, since you use 'new voice'

"Oh, rats, he's wearing underwear,"

Hmm. Would she really be looking for that sort of thing, or is it a liberty
you're taking for the use of humor.

Akane pouted for a moment.

Then she brightened.  "But I can fix that."  Akane pulled her pen-
wand out of her purse and pointed it upwards.

Sae looked horrified.  "Akane-chan, you shouldn't do that!"

Probably can't either. Watchers are in fact, obscenely powerful. As I
recall, they have access to the Power Cosmic. Basically they can affect
reality on a limited basis. One alt of Uatu here gave Galactus a run for the
money, though he eventually lost and died.

"What did she mean by that?" Sae asked Nanaka, puzzled.

Looking up at the sky, the Watcher announced, "Ah.  With great
power comes great naivete."

Heh. Okay. Do what you will. It's amusing.

- - - - - - - - - -
During the afternoon, the students noticed a continual flow of
additional reporters.  A few military helicopters hovered briefly
over the school, then departed.  For most students, that was all.
The students in Sae and Nanaka's homeroom were distracted somewhat
by the huge eyes observing them from just outside the window, but
the teachers did their best to make sure their attention did not
stray too long.

I'm sure erasers were flung fast and furious.

"Sae, he means the alien who just spent the whole afternoon
staring at you," Nanaka explained, clenching and unclenching her
fists.  "We have to figure out how to prevent the whole world from
noticing that it's you he's following around.  Or do you WANT to
spend the rest of your life in a laboratory?"

Sae: Well, I did consider becoming a scientist, so I guess I could spend my
life there.

"We'll try the exchange spell again.  That'll send him back to
outer space, exchanged for a meteor or a comet," announced Takeo.

"We never got that one to work right!" protested Nanaka, to no
avail.

Yes, that happens to her frequently.

"We have to be able to see the object we're trying to exchange,"
added Aburatsubo.

"well,"

Well

"Takeo, you've messed up the circle there," pointed out Aburatsubo
with a bit of asperity in his voice.

asperity. I can't think of the last time I've seen that one used.

"Heh, heh," Takeo noted, chuckling nervously as he erased that
part (which looked vaguely like an unclothed Sae) and redrew it.

Not surprised, though;

Aburatsubo approached Nanaka and whispered in her ear.  Her
eyes widened and she nodded.  "Sae, just close your eyes for a
moment.  Think about the five of us back on Earth.  Now, click
your heels together three times and repeat, 'There's no place like
home'."

Sae did, and the club members all vanished.  The Watcher remarked,
"With great power comes great susceptibility to suggestion, it
seems.  I must make a note of that."

Heh

- - - - - - - - - -
That night, Nanaka paced her room in worry.  What were the alien's
real intentions toward Sae?

Watcher: I like... to watch.

 Things were no better once the three walked onto the school

grounds.  The Watcher was standing just inside the school gates,
being scrutinized by the students and reporters.

Wacthers do tend to ge watched, which is why they don't appear all that
often and choose just to observe. :)

"Err... right," the reporter who'd asked the question scratched
his head with his pencil.

He'll be doing that a lot, I suspect.

"I don't know if he'll come back, Sae.  But if you really want to
get to know him, you'll find a way."

An amusing, silly little tale. Didn't expect to see Uatu in this. Nice
appearance. I approve. Grammar was good and flowed well.


DB Sommer

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