To start, the quotes and apostrophes showed up just fine for me. But
since one person said otherwise, maybe you should look into formating your
writing before sending. There are some good ones listed in the FFML FAQ.

    As for the story...I'm not really sure what to think, just yet, but it
has potential. Your writing is good, though I think you move the story a
little fast. For example, I would have liked to see some more from Kulloden,
and maybe have some buildup before the Princess is kidnapped.

    And this may be a picky point, but I think Akane's a tad out of
character. Usually she's a bit stronger and more assertive when kidnapped.

    I would like to see more, though ^-^

- Denise



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