--- Michael A Chase <mchase@ix.netcom.com> wrote:


<snip> 

Suggested changes: {before : after}

Feel free to snip any suggestions you aren't commenting on directly.

"It's a simple task," Sophia grinned.  "He only {haves : has} to

defeat my

NINJAS!"

The old woman snapped her fingers and the entire room exploded into
motion.  Hidden panels {side : slid} to the side, baskets and boxes

popped open,

{ninja : ninjas} even stepped from behind brooms and hat racks.

Just a matter of preference, perhaps, since the word HAS become
americanized, but correct plural form of 'ninja' is in fact, 'ninja'
since the word does not receive a plural 's' in the original language. If
the writer wants to use 'ninjas' they are more than welcome to. Since one
of the characters has already used 'NINJAS' in the above line, the
correction is important.

Sorry to whine; I just feel a little strange seeing this after ready
through 8,000 lines changing 'ninjas' to 'ninja'.

=====
Later,
Rick "Let's use clever quotes!" Spiff
"Wait a minute, I don't have breasts, I'm a guy!  Damn American censors!" - Zoicite, from "The Lust Virus" by Kuragari no Hateshiganai no Sensei
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