On 24 Feb 2003 10:29:13 -0800, Christopher J. " McFarland 
<homernet@nethere.net> wrote:

A couple of comments on an otherwise excellent story:
1.)  Change the title.  It doesn't really fit very well.
2.)  The part at the end showing the future serves no purpose.  You've
already established that the photos prove the time trip happened.  If
you /really/ want to expand the story, work a little bit more on the new
Ranma/Nodoka relationship.  I think it would be fun to see how things
turn out now that they understand each other better.

I think the title was intentionally erroneous to reflect that even though 
Ranma could have cured his curse, he didn't waste his wish to know more 
about his mother.

And I think the end scene wasn't to show the time trip happened, but rather 
to end the story on a light, sweet note.

I thought the story itself was a lovely WAFFy piece. It seemed a little 
short to me though, fleshing out Ranma's grandma would be nice.

All imho, of course. :)

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