Well, comments...

Technically, very well written with just a couple of minor quibbles that
others have pointed out.  An easy-to-read style, which is so important.

An old, extremely-worn Ranma fanfic idea:  let's start the series over, but
with something different.  A tall, polite Ranma?  Hmm.

Can't really say whether the story idea is worthwhile, since you've
developed little of the plot.  But this is a nice, pleasant to read snippet,
which is enough to compel me to read the next entry, when it comes out.
We'll see how you do then.

Good start.  Write more.

-Richard


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