Nodoka's katana is in it's sheath again.

Nodoka's eyes went wide as Mara's hands went up and energy gathered in 

them.

"What!?! How did you...?" The demoness threw her hands forward, a wave 

of

energy throwing Nodoka to her knees. There was a sudden shrinking 

sensation, and Nodoka was finding it hard to keep her suddenly huge katana 
pointed at the blond haired demon. Mara hopped down out of the tree, 
looking slightly surprised.

She had earlier re-sheathed the katana.  Perhaps the sheath and handle
suddenly felt much bigger.

Good catch here.  I'll change it.

Nodoka suddenly smiled. "Because my husband has finished sneaking up 

behind

you."

Last I recall, Mara was high up in a tree.  She may have floated down
while baiting Nodoka though.

Whoops.  Right, not hard to change, thankfully.

Nodoka gasped in fear and tripped herself on her kimono as she quickly
stepped backwards, falling on her back just outside the front door. 

Mara,

however paid her no attention, instead focusing on herself. Slowly her 

lower

torso started to {slid : slide} toward her upper body, then rejoined it, 

coming

together as one unit with a bright flash.

Mara slowly stood, brushing herself off and and glaring at Genma 

angrily.

"Now that HURT! You're going to pay for that, mortal." She grinned 

slowly.

"And when a demon says you're going to pay...." Genma {leapt : leaped} 

away from her,

jumping to the rooftop and leaping out of sight in only moments. "Wow!" 

Mara

said, sounding slightly impressed. "Now that was some fast running 

away...."

She levitated after him, following Genma into the backyard, leaving 

Nodoka

alone by the front door. Ranma's mother turned around to follow, only to
fall flat on her face as she tripped on her oversized kimono.

Mara had the large martial artist {cornered : trapped} in the corner of 

the Tendo's back

yard when a sixth sense warned her of danger behind. Mara glanced 

backwards

just in time to dodge the warded arrow that an armored Samurai warrior 

had

launched at her only an instant before. "Whoa!" She skittered backwards
quickly, getting some distance between her and the {Samurai : samurai} 

as he nocked yet

another arrow to his great bow. Mara heard Genma rising to his feet 

behind

her at the same time and sighed. "I
don't believe this." She raised a hand. "Fine, you win this round." 

Snapping

her fingers, she vanished in a puff of smoke.

"Are you alright, little girl?" Ran asked the scared looking waif. < Is
that... a {Katana : katana}?>

Kogorou looked at the gate sign. "Ah, the Tendo {dojo : Dojo}! This is 

it alright!"

He turned to look at Nodoka. "Hello little girl, do you live here?"

Nodoka shook her head at first. "No, I don't, the Tendo's are good 

friends

of mine...." Then she trailed of into silence. The look of shock on her 

face

deepened for a moment. "Ah no!" She said suddenly in a very different 

tone

of voice. "My... Daddy is here! He's Mr.. Tendo's friend! I'm too little 

to

practice {the :} martial arts, my Daddy says so! I'm waiting for him."

Nabiki met them at the door. "{Can : May} I help you?" She glanced at 

Nodoka

knowingly. "Our "guest" has left unexpectedly, 'Manami'-chan. Who are 

these

nice people?"

I expect Nabiki to know the more formal way of speaking.  It's your
call whether she uses it this time.

Detective Mouri was already hot on the case. "What do you know about a
missing girl?" He questioned the fat, balding man in the {Gi : gi}.

Genma was quick to deny anything. "Missing girl?" He pointed at Nodoka. 

"But

who's that over there?" Everyone glanced at the small girl in confusion.
Before they turned back, there was a loud splash from the pond nearby. 

When

they did look for the man, he was gone... and a {Panda : panda} was 

playing with a

tire near the pond.

Nabiki rolled her eyes. "{Right daddy : Right, Daddy}, I'll take his 

panda-ness and feed him.

What did you want me to feed him too?"

My thought exactly.  Midorigame is probably hungry.

Conan spoke up. "Could I have some tea Mister? I'm kinda thirsty!" He
grinned winningly as he sat down at the kotatsu in the middle of the 

room,

swinging his legs underneath the low table. < There are.. {Claw : claw} 

marks all

over the floor here, but mostly by the... Shoji table?>  Conan scooted 

over

towards the game.  < These pieces... They have odd scratches in the 

sides...

And there are several coarse hairs here... both black and white.>  Conan
slipped his micro recorder under the table.  < Its starting to add up... 

but

I need more evidence.>

I thought he put a bug under the table.  He'd have to sneak in to
recover his recorder before he can hear anything from it.  On the
other hand, it may be hard to monitor a radio bug since Dr. Agasa's
place isn't next door.

Dr. Agasa's technology is pretty advanced.  His radio gear is usable over 
great distances.

Later, at Dr. Agasa's house. Conan was rapidly typing into the doctor's
computer. From behind him, a mildly curious voice of Agasa's {house mate 

: housemate}

came. "What are you working on?"

This is duplicated below.  It probably fits better in the later
location.

Which is where is is meant to be.  Apparently I failed to delete the old 
text when I moved and added to it.

prepared herself. "I think I'm ready. Go ahead."

You've mentioned long hair on Akane Tendo a couple times.  I thought
Akane didn't grow her hair back once it was cut by Ryoga, so Akane
Tendo wouldn't be the 'long haired' one unless Akane Saotome got a
buzz-cut.

Akane and Minako share a hair style, as Ranma and Ranko do.  It's not 
necessarally the way Jusenkyo works, but in this case I desided why not?  
Physically Akane and Minako are linked, as Ranma and Ranko were before they 
were seperated.  When Ranma's hair grew, so did Ranko's, and vice versa, so 
I desided it would be the same with Minako and Akane, and since Minako has 
long hair, Akane would get long hair as well, which one be of the few things 
that carries over from one to the other.

"I think I may have found another lead to the black organization, Ai." 

Conan

said, intent on his internet search. "I met a girl who acted very 

peculiar

today... as if she wasn't a girl at all, but an older lady."

You've inserted this scene twice with some additions in the
second copy.  You probably want to drop the first occurance.

The second copy is the correct one.  You may ignore the first.  I've already 
deleted it from the master.


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