Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Thu, 26 Sep 2002 14:42:20 -0400 "L.S McGill" <lsmcgill@hotmail.com> wrote:
Now, it was just another sign of the depression she had sunk into.
She had never thought any place could ever be as huge as Tokyo. Nine
days of searching high and low had revealed not a single clue to
Ranma's whereabouts, and she had only explored a small part of the
city. It was far worse than she had anticipated, and she had not
counted on the problems she had encountered as a girl alone in Tokyo.
While she had been safe enough from the one mugger she had met, she
spoke poor Japanese, and what little money she possessed had soon been
{gone : spent}. Nothing in her life as an Amazon warrior had prepared her for a
place like this insane city.
Shan Pu sighed. A drunk. Just what she needed on top of every
thing else. She started to turn when she felt fingers grasp her by the
neck and lift her in front of the drunk {womans : woman's} face. She tried to turn
to bite her, or get her claws into her, but try as she might she
couldn't {reach . : reach.}
"Schimmer down, Schampoo." The woman said, the shock of hearing
her name used {causing : caused} Shan Pu to stare at the {self proclaimed : self-proclaimed} goddess.
"I heard you in the bar, and I schaid to... to myschelf... I schaid,
Urd... now there's schomeone who could use a little of the old Urd
magic..." She looked Shan Pu in the eye. "Scho I came over... Just
for you! Don't you feel special?"
Fine. She wished that her relationship with Ranma would work out
happily for everyone concerned! But most of all, she wanted to be let
go!!!
If Kami-sama didn't have so much riding on the situation, all she'd have
gotten would be the last part of her wish. Allowing a goddess on probation
submit a wish to the Ultimate Force is just another indication that things
are more than what they seem.
"Save me! She's gone crazy!" the boy cried as he leaped into Zhu
Shu's arms. They both went down in a tangle... She tried to roll to
get free, and finally got her feet under her for a leap away from the
wildly flailing boy, but just as she jumped, his hand caught in her
{underware : panties : underwear} and she ended up in a heap on top of him when they caught
around her ankles.
She kicked free and scuttled back against the wall as the boy {set : sat}
up, holding her panties. As he leered, a young girl wearing a tiger
stripped bikini flew out of the gate.
"Oh, no. I'm an Oni. We were going to conquer earth a few years
ago, but Ataru beat me in a game of tag, then asked me to marry him, so
{daddy : Daddy} called it off. I moved here to be with Ataru." She waved a hand
in a vague direction overhead. "{Homes : Home's} out that way a couple of hundred
light-years, I think."
Lum bounced up. "Oh! Yeah! She's got a curse! {that's : That's} why I
brought her to see you!"
"A curse?" Sakura shook her head. "I thought she was one of your
weird alien friends... A curse.... I haven't worked on a curse for
awhile... {let's : Let's} see..."
"Ah!" Sakura went over to a bookcase against the side of her desk
and search for a moment, finally picking up a book labeled _Great
Curses of China and {how : How} to Cure Them._ She flipped through it's pages
for a few moments.
Lum thought hard for a moment... then brightened.. "Mendo! He
always seems to have ways of finding things out! I'm sure he could
help!" She grabbed Zhu Shu by the hand and led her out of the office.
"And in the meantime, you can stay in the {Saucer!... : saucer!}"
"Crescent Beam Shower!" the blonde called as she launched a shaft
of golden light at Zhu Shu. Zhu Shu's ribbons flashed into a spiral
dance around her as the beam split into dozens of shafts of light and
arced towards her. Her ribbons disintegrated, deflecting the barrage,
but the impacts threw off her landing and she came down badly on her
ankle, twisting it as she hit the roof. Through the pain, she sensed
the ionization of the air and {Lum born : Lum-born} reflexes tried to move her away
as Jupiter called, "Supreme Thunder Dragon!"
The sound of a motorcycle pulling {upto : up to} the end of the alley
interrupted her thoughts, and Shan Pu {hastely : hastily} pulled back her extended
paw and sheathed her claws. She backed into a space between two trash
cans where she could see Urd and evaluate the situation as the sound
{for : of} approaching feet could be heard.
{A : An} absolutely radiant woman stepped into her line of sight, dressed
in a flattering outfit similar to what she had seen on young adults all
around Tokyo, with a loose skirt and long grey hair tied back in a
tail. Next to her, carrying an umbrella was another young girl, a
little older than Shampoo, with long black hair wearing an oversized
jacket and jeans.
The first woman bent down to touch Urd's forehead, and Shan Pu
realized she had facial tattoos similar to Urd's. Was this another
{goddess. : goddess?}
"You're more than welcome to stay with us for {awhile : a while}." Belldandy
offered. "Keiichi won't mind, and I can get you some fresh cream, or
tea if you'd like to change first. I'm sure we can come up with some
clothes to fit you."
Shampoo looked at the contraption the younger girl had built to
move the unconscious Urd and blinked, then shrugged. It was obvious
that they were more than normal humans, and supposedly, she had been
granted her wish.
True, Urd did let go of her.
With a tail twitch, she walked over and allowed Belldandy to pick
her up, and in a fairly short time found herself falling asleep in the
{goddesses : goddess's} lap as Skuld drove them all home...