L.S McGill wrote:

First... Way to short (so sayeth the guy who can't make a chapter less than 
50K)  Hope there's more to this later.

Probably is... he's been doing chapters in halves, for the past several, 
releasing two in fairly rapid succession and then making us wait and 
wait for the next. ^_^

He took a step away, out of his arms, and looked at him. "Ranma," said
Hotaru in a voice as one coming from a crypt. All heads turned to her.

***Kinda akward phrase.  I'd write it (in a voice that could have come from 
a crypt)

Agreed. I couldn't come up with something to work, but this fits.

***Humm, fewer grammer errors than usual. MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!***

Very solidly seconded!

-- 
       The Wanderer

I feel I should warn you I'm slightly mad.

Warning: Simply because I argue an issue does not mean I agree with any 
side of it.

A government exists to serve its citizens, not to control them.

"I would rather be exposed to the inconveniences attending too much 
liberty than to those attending too small a degree of it."
  - Thomas Jefferson to Archibald Stuart, 1791. ME 8:276


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