Bjorn wrote:

loose and low. To make matters worse, the material was white, and

Kachiko

was obviously not wearing a bra underneath. If she was hit with an

errant

spray of water, an event that happened all too often at the Tendou
household, the shirt would become semi-transparent, and then the whole

world

would be able to see...

Akane:  The same thing that Ranma openly displays about once
every other chapter?

 Kasumi: But it's different when Ranma does it. He's not mother.

Yearning for his long lost wide, Soun founding a bit more backbone as

he

quietly made his way through the kitchen until he was on the periphery

of

the porch, a mere handful of feet behind Kachiko's sitting form. She

had

not

reacted to his presence. Her back remained to him as she continued

facing

the yard, her head still slightly swaying back and forth for no

apparent

reason.

"long lost wife"

It's a good typo, though. ;)

 Heh. One she would not like, to be sure.

Kachiko shook her head, then began looking past Nodoka. "Apparently

she

didn't tell me everything. I was only expecting Ranma's mother. They

didn't

tell me his grandmother was coming along too. Is your daughter

around?"

Heh.

 I like it too, since it's the usual tactless thing for her to say, as well
 as showing she's a terrible judge of age. Still a point of contention for
 some.

A derisive snort escaped Genma's lips. He was instantly made sorry by

the

evil stare that was unleashed upon him. Almost as though he was

reading

lines, badly, he stated, "That's right. My wife is only thirty-five."

Inspired. ;)

 Thanks. I thought it was a perfect touch, that for all of Nodoka's
 posturing, she does lie about her age. Just not as badly as Kachi seems to
 think. :)

"Yes. It means you're stalking me." Kachiko swooned.

Ah... blunt honest romanticism.  Refreshing! ;)

 Heh.

Hiroyoshi rubbed his eyes, sniffled, then leveled an accusatory finger

at

Kachiko. "That woman touched my bottom in a way that made me

uncomfortable."

It's nice to see kids abreast of today's modern issues. ;)

 Yep. And as we can tell, this is exactly why Kachi does not look forward to
 parenthood. :)

Nodoka felt her heart stop in her chest momentarily. "You and that

girl...

had a problem with... the clap?"

Heh.  Yes, this is exactly the sort of conclusion that
Nodoka would leap to. ;)

 Yep. Always Ranma characters jump to the worst conclusion.

A much more introspective chapter.  Kachiko's internal
monologue is a bit too long, but it covers a lot of material
that probably needs to be covered,

 Agree. I needed to show the way her mind works to the readers, since I'd
 been getting some complaints about it. Hopefully it addressed them, since I
 don't plan on this to be very heavy.

 so I really don't have

any good suggestions as to what to do about it.  On the
other hand, I really liked the ending Kasumi-and-Kachiko
scene.  It was touching, made a number of points in a
natural, subtle way, and didn't delve into soppy
sentimentalism.  Good stuff.

 Thanks. It was meant to show she has a softer side, but she's still
 unrelenting in what is expected of her vs. what she wants to do.

Anyways, looking forward to the next chapter... though, to
be honest, I hope you end the cliffhanger in Avenging
first. ;)

 That is the plan. I'm hoping to start work on it sometime early in the
week.
 We'll see what happens.

 D.B. Sommer

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