Donald Lee Granberry wrote:

Numerous small corrections to grammar, changed Ranma's reaction to the
fight, as well as several small embellishments made to different parts of
the chapter. Probably worth re-reading.

Looks good, Don.  I reread the Ranko/corpsman exchange like you suggested,
and it made better sense the second time around.  It's not the way I would
have done it, which is, I think, where I had a problem with it <grin> --
but it does work.

-- Bob

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