Michael Chase wrote:

Kiyone smirked at the situation and grabbed Mihoshi by the hand, forcing

her

past the scene. "Nice work."

I liked it too.

Thanks. All this is really good for is laughs. Nothing deep or meaningful in
this piece.

Kiyone, who had her firearm halfway drawn out, slowly placed it back in

the

holster. Once convinced there would be no further {shootinh : shooting :

shootin'}, she poked her

head in. Seeing only the captain present at his desk, she hesitantly
entered. Mihoshi took the opposite tact and entered immediately and

without

a hint of fear. Unwilling to be upstaged by her partner, Kiyone entered

with

her back straight and jaw thrust out, as though she hadn't been almost

hit

by the blast.

Though "shootin'" seems a bit informal. :}p

Blech. Should have been 'shooting.'

Both she and Mihoshi entered the office and gave a crisp salute.

"Captain

Drebbin. Officers Makabi and Kiramitsu reporting for special assignment.
Umm, your muzzle seems to be smoking, Sir."

Is Officer an alternative title to Detective?

It probably can be, though I'm changing it to detective.

Mihoshi began skipping in joy. "I knew you'd like that idea. I can't

wait to

unleash my 'Bad Cop' act on him."

Well, there's always Bad Cop, Worse Cop.

Yeah. I almost named this that, and then realized I had heard it somewhere
before.

Yep, inspired from the Old 'Police Squad/Naked Gun movies' from way back
when. And no, Kiyone won't meet a grizzly demise. She has to show up for

the

sequal as she and Mihoshi go toe to toe with 'Gregarious' Spacey and the
'Unusual Suspects.' ^_^. Not quite as satisfied as I thought I would be

when

I first came up with the idea of Mihoshi's 'Bad Cop' routine being

better

than anyone, including Kiyone, would suspect. Once the PS elements

showed

up, she became the straight man to all the punchlines even worse than

usual.

It also reminded me of the hostage scene in Speed.

But it's Not Her Fault!  (Someone had to say it.)

Of course. :)

Thanks for the comments. It was a little quiet on this one until last night.

D.B. Sommer

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