First, off, I have to say this: ew.

All right, then, a brief review: Personally, I think this fic would've
been much better if, instead of Ryouga explaining everything, there were
a flashback scene.  As it is, it's just kind of...there.  Without much
of an ending, either. ^_^;

If it were fleshed out a bit more, it'd be a good one-shot.  As is, it
reads like a fragment.

Lawrence

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