Ragun wrote:

$Trucking right along I go.

Ditto. Used most of the grammar corrections and recommendations.

lower and upper torso. A white 'M' and 'W' crossed over one another in
red
section of the upper body. The only part of his flesh that showed was
his
nose and mouth. Red goggles were sewn into his headpiece, covering his
eyes.

$He just happened to have an alternate color scheme laying around.

He did have several ideas for costumes, he's enthuseastic about being a
supervillain. Obviously 'The Whizzer' was a bad choice. :)

The other newcomer, who had spoken earlier, was far more subdued. He was
wore loose white pants and shirt, and had a vest and bracers made of
some
sort of scaled mail. Hoop earrings hung from both ears, and oddly
enough,
pantyhose was wrapped around his head and waist, serving as a headband
and
sash respectively. A couple of gourds were tied to his waist by the
makeshift sash.

$Oooh.  Taro's badass enough to make a good villian.

I like to think so.

The man dressed in blue and red said, "That's right. Pantyhose just uses
pantyhose as his gimmick. It goes with his name."

"His name?" the duo asked.

"Pantyhose Tarou."

$Gee, who's he fused with?

Abomination.

you thought they were all dumb," the man in purple protested.

Captain Japan smirked. "If my name was something as stupid as Pantyhose,
I'd
have been happy to call myself just about anything else. Even something
as
lame as 'The Dazzler'."

$Ouch.  I remember her, if memory serves correctly.

Part of the Disco craze, she was. Later she cleaned  up her act, though.
Ditched the god awful rollar skating nightmare she used to wear. Even I am
in no hurry to collect that title.

"Speed Demon," Mint preened proudly.

The heroes applauded.

$Heh.  Nice to see that he finally gets a little respect.

He is dangerous, though not in a particuarly lethal way.

"MAKE IT STOP! MAKE IT STOP!" he shouted, covering his ears and rolling
on
the ground unable to stop himself.

$Heh.  I said the exact same thing while watching the oscars on tv the
other day.

I only watched a little of them. Boring as hell. I used to enjoy the Billy
Crystal days. Now he could MC the show. I still remember his Jack Palance
and Hannible Lector skits.

back.

one
that is backed by the true might of Asgard!" Thor meeting of Thor's fist
with Power Man's flesh sounded like one of her thunderous bolts. The
villain's body went sailing across the reservoir and into the far wall.
The
force from the impact embedded him in the side of the cavern, creating a
crater that resembled a meteorite impact,

$Not one of those comedic scenes where it's a perfect impression of his
body in the wall?

Nope. Besides, he had to get back into the fight later.

"Like someone wrapped in pantyhose has any business accusing someone

else of
being gay!" Captain Japan's next punch was deflected, as was the leap
kick
he tried to use.

$Taro: I'm a tranvestite, you moron!  I'm not gay!

Heh.

Tarou backed just out of reach and smirked. "By the time I'm done with
you,
I'll have you busted down to Private Parts while you'll be calling me
General Bad Ass."

$I always liked General Mayhem and Corporal Punishment.  Major Asshole
was just annoying.

Major Fu*k Up was annoying too. :)

anyone else, and it would have taken the experts at Kunou Enterprises

months
to figure out how to reverse engineer it. She would have known if they
tried
when she had returned. To the best of her knowledge, the sword should
have
still been in the prototypes vault at Kunou Enterprises. How could it be
in
the hands of this gaudily dressed buffoon halfway across a continent?

$And the fact that he reminds her of her brother doesn't occur to her
at all.

It will once she has a chance to think about it.

She was so surprised by the appearance of the weapon she neglected to
fire.
The hesitation cost her as the tip of the blade shattered the circle
that
made up the center of her chest weapon array. The Swordsman discharged a
power blast through the blade just as the tip breached the armor's
exterior.
Past the insulation provided by her armor, the blast instantly
overloaded
the majority of her systems. Only the surge protectors she had placed
throughout the suit kept it from being ruined forever, though the smell
of
burning ozone indicated not all the systems had survived the blast. Iron
Rose herself received a nasty shock from the backlash through the armor
from
the discharge.

Between the weight of the armor and the shock, Iron Rose was unable to
stay
upright. She fell over, almost completely inert. Within the confines of
her
bulky metal coffin, Kodachi felt as though her chest was on fire. "Not
the
pacemaker," she thought to herself. That was the most heavily protected
part
of the entire armor, the only thing that kept her alive.

$She has a pacemaker in her heart?  Why?

Shrapnal embedded in her chest in chapter 1. It's not just a pacemaker, it
keeps the inoperable pieces from moving closer to her heart as well.

The speedster examined the device more closely. "Ah ha! Found it. See?"
He
showed where the button was on the grip. He touched the top of the
button,
then grabbed the club in the middle again. "Thanks for the warning. In
gratitude, I'll be gentle when I knock you out."

$Heh.  Mint can't get any respect, even from you.

I like him. He's just a bit goofy. :)

"Your sword's disguised to shoots beams of energy, you hypocrite!"

"It's not the same thing," Swordsman contended.

"It's exactly the same thing!"

$Heh.  But of course he wouldn't see it that way.

Nope. It's never the same thing when it comes to him.

"Again you try to shift the blame."

"I am not shifting any blame!"

$But he is on the defensive, which always means you're losing.

If you're Kunou, it's impossible not to be on the offensive. There's never
any doubt in his mind. :)

horns and a snout, becoming an inhuman visage. Wings, feathered and
green,
sprouted out of the back of a torso that became inhumanly large and
deformed. Even a tail sprouted out of the back of the spine, moving
independently and possessing the head and fangs of an eel.

"Okay, I didn't see that one coming," Captain Japan admitted.

$It'd be hard to, I admit.

Someone actually came up with it, but only because they thought his cursed
form would be neat.

Tarou
stood, now there remains only a monster. Witness the majestic strength,
the
unimaginable might, the incomprehensible power of... the
A-bra-mination."

$Badumswishching!

Blame Gary this time, not me. :)

Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

$When 1/4 the way through commenting on this, my spacebar quit working
for no apparent reason.  Actually, I couldn't type any new characters,
but if I deleted one I could replace it.  A reboot didn't help.  My only
conclusion is that this part was so long that it was near the maximum my
mail program would allow (Outlook.  Don't laugh.) and there wasn't room
for the comments.  That's why I split it in two.

No prob. Will try to get to the second half now.

D.B. Sommer

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