Sorry it's taking me so long to get back to people. Got this little Diablo2
LoD addiction to deal with. :)

DB Sommer wrote:

[Author's note: Just need one more person to get back to me with part B.
Should be out within the next 8 days. Until then, enjoy.]

Must... complete... backlog...

Mine's bigger than yours by now, I'd wager. Love to have a day off to catch
up, but I'd probably just try to get through the rest of act III first.:)

Yes, Yun thought, he would be poor until the end of his days, which

would

hopefully be more than the ones this boy had remaining.

'the ones' sounds a little stilted.

Not sure what I'd replace it with at the moment, though.

The assault on the senses was only made easier by the fact that there

was

less of Fekish to go around. Unlike Hasam, the clothing chosen for his
friend seemed more form-fitting, though given Fekish's usual easygoing
nature, he could have worn an iron maiden and still seemed obliviously
happy.

'his companion' -- since this is all from Hasam's point of view, that
sounds like he's addressing Fekish.

Kay

Wait... it sounds like you're implying that Fekish's clothing is
tighter, but Hasam already was uncomfortably constricted in his
clothing. Is that intentional? Seems a bit confused...

No. Will change.

"Why are you making us wear these ridiculous outfits again?" Hasam said
miserably to his superior,

, -- . (betcha THAT one was caught already...)

No, actually.

this festering pit of infidels and their unbelieving ways. I will

personally

see to it the woman is taught her place in the proper scheme of things

and

is brought low. Hahahaha!"

'The woman'. Hmm...

>From chapter 2. She's going to be plagueing the Avengers in a while and I
needed to refresh people's memories of her.

"Oh, that's easy. I dated a biochemist while we were here. She'd get a
little drink in her and then would go on and on about the different

types of

bio-weapons her company had her make. I paid attention to what she said
because women like it when you take their jobs seriously, respect their
opinions, and listen to what they have to say. I read that in 'Cosmo'."

Heh.

Thought it would be a cute touch.

finally spotting a solution to their problem. "See those two guys over
there? The ones standing next to the gate and looking around like

they're

trying to spot someone?"

Hehehe...

Well, this is Mint and Lime.

"Oh, come on. What would we tell them? Be on the lookout for a pair of
Chinese men. One of them is somewhat slender, fast, and likes wearing

wolf

skins while the other is seven feet tall, has four hundred pounds of

solid

muscle, and likes tiger skins? Lots of guys look like that. They'd

probably

walk off with the wrong people."

Mint and Lime? But... they aren't talking like idiots...

Well, you need to wait for it.

"Oh, that's easy. We'll... Umm, that is we can just... Actually we

can...

Ohh. Look at those. Are those titties?"

That's more like it.

They're just easily distracted.

"I think that hot looking chick has got to be at least a," Ryo Saeba

held

out his hands in the woman with the tan vest's general direction, and

cupped

them, squeezing slightly as if testing the ripeness of a pair of

invisible

tomatoes. "38-C," Ryo concluded.

Ah, good old Ryu.

Oui.

She grabbed one ear on each of them, then brought the ears together

rather

violently. Each man's respective head followed the path their ears had
taken. Their heads produced a similar thud. "Ow!" Both said as one,
enhancing the brothers' identical nature.

Ow!" Both -- Ow!" both (?)

Latter, I think

"Think we should try that? I mean dressing like butch women."

"Couldn't hurt."

...

I've known people this desperate. Never me, though. Really.

"Here." Feeling sympathetic to the twins' plight, the shorter man handed

Ryo

the briefcase.

That was easy.

Yes, but that's the only part that is.

The pair looked the situation over. The larger one said, "I think our
cover's blown."

"I'd be inclined to agree."

Heh!

Each has several skill points in 'Stating the Obvious'

"Our instructions were clear if that happened. This is the moment you've
been waiting for."

you've -- we've (?)

Nope. Mint's the only one that's been waiting for it.

Mint turned on his comrade. "No! When we're in costume, we use our
super-villain names. I'm the Whizzer."

Hmm... I wish I knew what that was a reference to.

It's a mix. Outfit is completely Bob Frank Whizzer from the 40's. Villianous
nature and eventually name change from the villianous 60's Whizzer who was
part of the Squadron Sinister.

Ryo grabbed the offered limb that held his wallet, then pulled out a set

of

cuffs. "All right. Being a terrorist is one thing, but there's nothing

lower

than being a pickpocket." Ryo slapped the cuff on the appendage he was
holding, only to discover...

Heh. Great line.

Thanks.

This screwed up, loser situation was exactly why she loathed super

powered

beings. And every time she encountered another one, her anger grew. She
didn't care if the media had dubbed some of them heroes. They were all a
threat. Something had to be done about them before it was too late.

Uh-huh. He picked up a segment of the sidewalk/flooring. That's gonna
work REALLY well.

She won't give up at the moment. In any case, this is groundwork for the
future as well.

call it a day. She would have preferred operating at night, but there

was

the restaurant to run and school to eventually enroll in, so this was

the

only time Ukyou had available to hunt down criminals for the rest of the
week.

Hehe...

When you're a teenager, sometimes you can only be a part time hero. :)

Tsujimoto gave her a warning stare. "How long have we been partners?"

Kobayakawa considered that and sighed. "Fine, I am. But I'm more subtle
about it than you."

"Agreed."

That was great.

Thanks. Even though I did receive some complaints at the same time about it.
:)

Daredevil sighed from his perch on the roof. It just figured; yet

another

loser super-villain to deal with, and a perverted one no less. Didn't

they

have any standards? Daredevil swore he would be going after the strong

one,

no matter how tough he was. Anything was better than fighting another

putz.

Hehehehe...

A rogue's gallery of rejects. Miller made Bullseye dangerous, at least.

"Where do you think you're going, boy?" Genma shouted to his son's back

as

the pair continued up the road. It had taken Genma nearly an hour to

track

his son down, given the tremendous lead the youth had built up since he

had

departed the Tendou residence earlier in the morning. It would have been

no

cause for concern, except the boy had taken all of his belongings with

him.

boy?" -- Boy?" (used as a proper name... I THINK...)

I guess. Will try to hunt down and change them.

"I'm a cute animal sidekick, not a mascot," Genma insisted.

Ranma: You should have been a piniata.

Heh

"But son-"

son -- Son (?)

will go ahead and change unless told otherwise.

"It's not easy. Responsibilities never are. But you're more than capable

of

managing it, once you set your mind to it. You just have to believe in
yourself." Genma adjusted his glasses again. It was all he had to say.

There

probably could have been more, but it would have just been repeating the
same thing in a different way. Best to leave it as is and wait for his

son's

reaction.

as is -- as it was (?)

kay, again and in other places.

Genma was left holding the shield, uncertain of what to say. More slowly

he

followed, the feeling of a lifelong dream shattering into a thousand

pieces,

echoing with every step taken.

I'm not sure if it holds true in the comic books, but I would think
that a hero (or even super-hero)is more than simply the sum of his
equipment.

Yep, but in Genma's case, the suit indicates he's taking responsibility for
his actions. Besides, if he doesn't keep his identity secret, Genny and
Nodoka will be open to attack.

when taken individually, but they went together like oil and maple

syrup.

Akane knew that was a bad mix. She had tried it in Home Economics, and

it

hadn't turned out well at all. Everyone that sampled the mixture had

agreed

on that.

Heh...

Had to give at least a passing nod to her cooking. Although I think using it
to create the 'cliche' for Tofu and Kasumi mixing was a nice touch.

That settled things. "I'll hold you to that." Akane grabbed her cane and
hobbled out of the office as best as she could. There were several

alleys

nearby that she could use to change. All she needed was one tap of the

cane

and then it would be time to fly to the airport and kick some butt as

only

the Goddess of Thunder could do.

Wish I had more constructive advice to offer. But you don't make
enough mistakes! Or I'm missing them...

Oh, I make them. Perhaps you were having an off day. :)

Anyway, interesting story, sorry for the lateness,

No, you never have to do that with me. My backlog is growing so big, even
I'm feeling intimidated. Haven't done a bit of writing since I sent this
chapter out, so don't expect it any time soon. Much to do, even after the
holidays.

and with luck I

can get to part B later today. (Sheesh, this thing's been sitting in
my to-C&C box since last year! ;)

Heh. Pretty soon when I say that, it won't be in that 'It's right after Jan
1st sense.

D.B. Sommer



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