DB Sommer wrote:

And here is the end

From Dream to Legend

Can't say I understand this one. It's just gibberish to me.

(And you would have had to follow my previous C+C's to get that one. ^_^)

  I have them ALL!

  Save, collect, and trade for swell prizes!

The women were both exceedingly fair, one light, the other dark, and
walked on each side of the man. The first had a gown of purest black,
contrasting the second's stark white, and the man's stoic gray. The man,
while not great of stature, was great in presence, seemingly
unstoppable, yet restrained, and made no move to force the King's
passing, until he was ready.

Basically, the man was whipped by his wife. Lacked the spine to do anything
without her approval. A true wuss.

 

   Dormio Animus -- Soul to sleep (Slumbering spirits)
   Suscitatio -- Awakening
   Infirme Conscius -- Weak consciousness (Faint awareness)
   Plene Evigilo -- To awaken completely
   Inchoatus Ludus -- Only begun/unfinished game (First move/End game)

See. Got every single one of them right. :P

  Hey, you survived the pretentious author attack. Good work!

That being said, I think that, however it worked out, they found
happiness, and love with one another. And that's what's important, in
the end. Being happy and loved... what more is there?

Woman of loose morals and booze. Preferably excesses of both.

  Woman, or women? I mean, Urd, Mitsune... Ahh... that's enough, really. Quite enough. No, you're right. Too much. Just woman. Not women.

Nice work. Chapter 5 seemed a little rushed, but the Belldandy making the
scarf for him since she knew who he was was a ncie touch. Very minimalistic,
but that was what you were going for. Would have preferred seeing more of
Megumi's thoughts later since you dwelled on them so much earlier. Not sure
whatelse to say other than nice work overall.

  Thanks. I've never seen another A!MG darkfic, so... I'm pretty happy with it. Thanks again for taking the time to C&C it all!

D.B. Sommer