even get an attractive female thief with a cat motif that feels

helplessly

drawn to them even while she's in the middle of fighting them. That's

what I

want, but what do I get? Weenie race car drivers. Men in frog costumes

with

springs in their feet that have the ability to *gasp* jump. Overweight

guys

that have bad hair and can glide. An owl is not an intimidating creature

to

anything but a mouse, godamnit!"

    Comma before the *gasp* ?

Should there be? He's is saying 'gasp' to indicate how unintimdating the
ability to jump is. Perhaps I should get rid of the asteriks or something.
Want to make sure the effect is right.

    #I'd say that adding dashes would be more effective.  Like this: "Men in
frog costumes with springs in their feet that have the ability to --
*gasp* -- jump."

Daredevil walked up to his opponent, twirling something that looked like

it

was from a UFO Catcher machine. "Give up, or do I show you the terrors of

my

new weapon, the 'testicular claw'?"

    Is 'UFO Catcher' a name brand? I always thought it was just the type
of machine...

I think you're right. I'm not going to capitalize catcher.

    #As far as I know, "UFO Catcher" is, indeed, a brand name.  I've seen
versions around that didn't use the name.


 Ja mata,
 Larry F

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