Ah, a DC fic. Sicne this is from the 'Plot? Don't worry, it will go away.'
man, I don't know what to expect:

Ah, another fic I found for back when ffml was still down.  A bit late,

but

here goes.  For the squeamish, [Lime] tag may apply.

In your work? *Gasp* who'd a thunk it?

And when is the next chapter of Lebian 1/2 due out?

Donny Cheng

A BLB production

BLB?

"Did you finish the diagnostics report?" Gendo asked, his voice
surprisingly steady and even despite his current physical exertion.

"This is hardly the time to ask that," Ritsuko gasped.

Hmm. With you I'm inclined to think this is teasing, but I wouldn't bet the
house on it.

"Did. You. Finish?" Gendo asked again, louder and punctuating
every word with a thrust.  His head was near hers now and she could
feel his breath against her neck.

"Y-yes," Ritsuko finally answered.  She hadn't been planning on
giving it to him until she adjusted some of the results.

Too much innuendo. Must be something else.

Ritsuko rose up in panic, not wanting him to go, as he often did
when the night was not as satisfactory as he wanted.

Hmm. Bit awkward, even for being vague. Recommend you reword it.

 Rather than

leave, she found herself being flipped over by him suddenly.  She knew
what he wanted, but was not fast enough to get to her hands to avoid
the chafing.  He never seemed to care if she was comfortable or not.
However, she found him motionless with his hand along her hip, and
found the time to push off the bed and onto all fours.

Very nicely done innuendo, I daresay.

She winced and her hands nearly gave way as Gendo swatted the
side of her buttock.  She closed her eyes waiting for the next one and
was again surprised to find that it didn't come.  Instead, his hand
remained where it had hit her, softly, almost teasingly.  "It won't
happen again."

The hand delved lower, off the rise and swell of her ass,

'ass' is too coarse for what you've done so far. . 'bottom' would be a
better word

He was admitting he was wrong?  She snapped her mouth shut to
avoid the almost impish 'told you so' that was on the tip of her
tongue.  Today was affecting her as much as it had affected Mo... the
Magi it seemed.  She blamed the giddiness of the younger members of her
staff.  Why, Maya's infectious joy almost caused her to crack a smile
when her assistant gave out chocolates to everyone, including her.

That it was a chocolate shaped as a dildo made her wonder, though.

She collapsed onto the bed, and a moment later he was finished.
However, instead of the usual sudden loss of him leaving her, she felt
him collapse atop her... but for only a moment.  The reassuring hand on
her shoulder might have been him trying to find purchase.  The tender
caress might have been his hand slipping on her sweat-soaked body.  The
lingering touch might have been because he was tired.  And the kiss....

Then he was gone, and she was strangely happy as she slept in her
comfortable exhaustion.

Hmm. Okay, it apparently was what it was supposed to be. You threw me there.
Nice prose. It flowed well, and I detected few grammar errors. Nice work.

Time for another chapter of L 1/2. ^_^

D.B. Sommer

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