"Over?" the second figure queried in an amused voice as the young
high school girl walked past her. "It is never over Guardian - you of
all people should know that."
over, Guardian
This is a mistake you make more than once. When a person
addresses another person by name or title, a comma goes
before said name or title.
The figure's statement caused the girl to break her step and she
turned to cast an annoyed look at the ashen doll like face of the
doll-like
So why doesn't Miyu banish Reiha, anyway? Isn't that her
job? Or does the TV Miyu only banish critters that attack
humans?
"Interest?" the oriental snow demon laughed softly to herself.
Redundant. Since they are in Japan, they are oriental
by default.
inside her throat, but the scream did not even have a chance to be
born as it, like the girl, were torn to shreds.
was torn
mortal shell had not taken any offence to the street's activities. The
Old Ones like her could be viscous with those that annoyed them. And
Yeah, I hate it when they ooze all over me. ("Viscous"
means a liquid which is thick and flows slowly)
Loren opened up her small case and scrambled around for her
swimming costume. One thing she had learnt as a result of her long
life was that one should never make yourself too vulnerable. Bathing
Bah. Nonsense. One is not more vulnerable because one
happens to be naked rather than wearing a swimming suit.
She was used to the social rules of Japanese families with sotto and
naka,
Not to mention blimpnarch and yuki-yuki-p'tang.
"No," Miyu replied simply and calmly rolled onto her back. "I have
never played a game like this before and I have no real desire to
either."
Oh come on! I bet you'd love Castlevania.