[snip]
Racing out of the inn, Kogimi expected to find herself in the outer
grounds of this islet. Instead, she found herself in hell. Spread out
before her instead of the normal forest pathway, bridge to the main bank
and
the outer grounds of the ryokan, all covered under the starry blanket of
night. Instead, she bolted out into a world transformed. In place of
what
This paragraph doesn't read right. I get what you mean, but there's
either missing words or ones in the wrong places - I'm not quite sure. :)
Other than that... wow?
Very, very nice.
Thanks!
Brian Payne
sofaspud@sofaspud.org
http://www.sofaspud.org