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On Fri, 23 Jun 2000 05:28:23 EDT Kenjiko2@aol.com writes:
I thought... well, a LOT of Akane's aggravation was based on the
simple fact
that she had NO idea what she was getting into-- or rather wad being
pressed
into.
But what if she had an idea before hand? What if she had...
Fair Warning
Now, this is a DAMN interesting idea for a fic...
(Yo, Rumiko-chan! Borrowing the kids for a while, don't worry.
I'll have them dry-cleaned before I return them. Kenko)
ROTFL
Akane blinked. Certainly unlike any fortuneteller that SHE had
ever heard of. She began to fill out the form.
It was a rather unusual form. The questions, after simple
things
like name, birthday, and blood type, began to get... unusual?
"Why do YOU think the chicken crossed the road? Do you think a
ferret would have the same motivations?"
Oh, my god...
"If you could be a canister of miso, which brand and type would
you want to be? Why? Would you feel insulted if you were put on
sale?"
"Do you bite your fingernails? Toenails? Earlobes? If the
last
is yes, how the HELL do you manage that?"
"What are your three sizes? Why are you so suddenly embarrassed
about that question?"
See above... :)
"Pepsi, Coke, or Calpis?"
Calpis? What's that?
The man blinked himself, and added uncertainly, "And you're not
to cook for him until you learn how, and you're to be reasonable
about your clothes not fitting him right. Now, that last is
unusual."
"My true love is a crossdresser?" Akane said, aghast.
LOL...
Akane left, feeling disoriented. The experience had somehow
rattled her nerves.
Might want to work on the wording here... "somehow" suggests that there
wasn't any easily definable reason why her nerves were rattled. Perhaps,
"The experience had definiatly rattled her nerves." Maybe put in
something about it being even weirder than Kuno's speech?
Her anger increased, her dislike of boys grew. The only thing
that kept her from becoming totally enraged at the entire male
gender
was the fortuneteller's prophesying.
prophecy
One evening, her father called her and her two sisters to make
an
announcement.
Most of us know what happened next.
But of course... :)
####
"Some fiancee THIS is, Daddy, he's a she."
####
"I'd really hate to be beaten by a boy..."
####
"THERE'S A PERVERT IN THE FURO!"
####
"I'm Ranma Saotome. Sorry about this..."
####
Might want to put the first instance of this line in at the top too...
She sat in shock as her sisters effectually passed the buck in
high speed, and her father agreeing happily. Then Ranma stood, and
yelled something about this not being the time, and that he was
going
back to China--
"Wait? Please?"
Might want to include some mental debate here about the decision to go
against her first instincts...
Kasumi and Nabiki stared. They had NOT wanted to be engaged to
this... creature, and had thus shifted the burden to Akane in a sort
of panic. But they were stunned at how Akane was taking it.
Stunned is definitly an understatement...
All in all, very good, and I'm looking forward to more.
Aaron Nowack
"Never let reality get in the way of a good hypothesis."
http://www.geocities.com/TimesSquare/Dungeon/5930/
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