Hi, my name's Marcus Sturm, and I'd like to comment on the comments.
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From: "Chess Combites" <chess@umr.edu>
To: "ffml" <ffml@fanfic.com>
Sent: Tuesday, April 18, 2000 10:49 AM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic] [X-over r1/2-Bastard][draft] Half a Loaf of
Bastard Chapter 1
Ryoga P Hibiki wrote:
On Tue, 18 Apr 2000 18:19:25 +0300 "Esa Karjalainen" <eruuska@ratol.fi>
writes:
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Ranma smiled, "Yeah, I just threw some stuff together out of the
fridge.
It
turned out pretty well." Ranma noticed that Schneider had a nice
smile,
but
shoved the thought rudely aside. Guys didn't think about other
guy's
smiles.
I have a bad feeling about this...
Agreed, I wonder if Ranma will get out of this somehow either
before the
next ch. or in the beginning. She kinda has to be a virgin if the author
wants to have any control of Dark Shnider at all.
I can think of 2 ways that wouldn't apply. One is if when he was blasted
out of his old dimension, he was split off
from his prison. The other way would be if the laws of magic in the
Ranmverse are different than his old one. One
result of those differences would be a different trigger fo his change. I
can just imagine what confusion would result
if he changes after making love. (snicker, snicker).
O_O!! This is bad yep yep bad.
As for Ranma, she was having a hard time concentrating on the TV.
She
couldn't seem to get Dark Schneider out of her mind. The way the
light
glinted in his eyes, the way his hair moved in an unseen breeze,
the way
his
muscles moved under his clothing...
Eep!
NO NO NO
Dark Schneider finally had enough of sitting around stareing at a
box and
stood up, closing the distance to the couch in 2 steps, then
sitting down
next to Ranma and gently took her face in his hands, his lips
moved to
her,
his arms sliding down to hold her against his strong body as their
lips
met
in a warm, lingering kiss.
...
O_O
scratch scratch hmmm..
Shouldn't this have caused DS to revert to Ruche. As I under stood it
the seal on his form wasn't broken just weakened. Unless you would like
to explain how Ranma's girl form is no longer a virgin.
Ranma froze for a moment, but only a moment, then responded
tentitively to
the kiss, her lips sweet and warm, lingering against his, allowing
herself
to forget about being a man for once.
aaAAAAAAAAAHHHH!!
Back! Back! Foul Demon!
*GAG*
Seriously though...
You just can't do that with Ranma. Well, not without magic, anyway.
I was under the impression that Ranma got a hold of that spice
Shampoo
had in part one somehow. I think this is what caused it anyway. Probably
something that would be revieled in part three somehow.
Ranma plot device # 4219
Shampoo caught with her hand in the spice rack again. Trouble begins
Especially if people return to the dojo in time to catch them at the
culmination of the act if it gets that
far, or even if it doesn't, Ranma wouldn't be able to explain if they were
caught just as they are.
Well, that's my 2 cents, and I hope it helps.