Just a comment or two. Kiyone has teal colored hair, so is not
technically a brunette. I was not sure who was being referred to at first
because of that description, until the dialogue started (the name was
familiar, but the hair color decription threw me). Other then a typo here
and there it was a good read. I never read it the first time around, so am
eager to see the next several chapters.

Ja Ne!,

Chris



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