KaraOhki wrote:
ah, look what I miss when I don't turn on the computer...
You should get a direct cybernetic link to your computer. That will take
care of everything.
*snip*
one. Initially, everyone -save Funuyaki and Autolycus- had been
delighted
^everyone--save
^Autolycus--had
Hmm. I usually leave a space between the begining and end of statements
held between two dashes. Is connecting them the correct way to do it, or
can it work either way?
"There's no way she could have known the code!"
'course not...that woman has more luck!
Actually, in the end, it turns out Mihoshi's airheadedness is purely an act
and she's been planning on stealing the Shihana for years. She was going to
pretend to get lost and have Tenchi help her steal it, when Malgaunt got it
before her. Now she's taking it back. Sorry to give away the ending there,
but you seemed to hit too close to home with that statement.
Really.
*snip*
"Don't... start!" Stargrave snarled, turning in anger upon the
diminutive
creature.
Some people don't learn, do they??
'Fraid so.
Autolycus
was right. Maybe the whole plot with the Shihana had been nothing
more than
a fanciful dream he would never have seen to fruition. Maybe it was
time to
get on with his life and get out of the pirate business altogether
and do
something else. Something peaceful. Perhaps-
Yes, please come to your senses!
The fic would end quite abruptly and anti-climatically if he did.
*snip*
^then that I
moment to
allow the information to sink in. "Think about it, Sa'bre. A first
generation space tree at your command. It'll be true power for you,
not
this bone the Yagdagron intend to throw at you for helping them
overthrow
an empire."
Very sneaky indeed.>
The bugger's been around for a while. He knows a few tricks and things
about human nature.
*snip*
Autolycus looked deeply into Sa'bre's eyes. It was as he suspected;
Stargrave would never give up on his quest. "Then it's time for me
to go. I
have no desire to watch you destroy yourself, or waste my time any
further.
You're on your own from now on." Autolycus turned and headed back
the way
they had come.
A nice show of integrity here. I like it.
When you get to be a couple of million years old, you realize the
transitionary nature of galatic empires. Personal integrity lasts longer
than them, in Autolycus's case.
And what if, in spite of all the difficulties that Malgaunt and the
others
had encountered, they still somehow succeeded in their plans and
overthrew
the Jurai Empire? Where would she be then? Could she afford to pass
up the
rewards if they were successful, even with the recriminations she
had over
her own actions? She had to make a choice, and she had to make it
now. What
was she going to do?
(Kara holds her breath)
Good thing I didn't end the fic there, then. ^_^
A soft smile was the first response she gave to Autolycus. For the
second,
she said, "My fate is here with these others. Nothing can change
that now.
Nothing."
A final sigh escaped Autolycus's lips. "Such a waste," he murmured,
then
turned and began walking away again.
DRAT
Ah, rooting for one of the bad guys to get away then, are you?
insisted on
pulling the sled at least half of the time, and it was the fair
thing to
do, but chivalry, along with a bit of a desire to be macho, made him
want
to pull it at least fifty minutes out of every hour.
Mihoshi was adamant. "No. It's been two hours and that means it's my
turn
to pull it. Now give it up, Tenchi."
Nice characerization on both of them
Thanks.
"Why don't we wait in there, you know, with how the weather is and
all?"
Tenchi pointed to the mouth of the cave.
"What do you mean? What's wrong with the weather?"
She's tougher than I thought
It just has to do with where she grew up.
*snip*
Once they were satisfied
with their space, they elected to leave the sled outside at the
mouth of
the cave, the size of it being far too large to make staying in the
cave
comfortable.
Why does that give me a BAD feeling??
Actually, your bad feeling proved groundless that time.
*snip*
just because the place was really warm. Anyway, we had a really fun
time
and all got along really well. The waiters were very accommodating
too."
Mihoshi got a far off look in her eyes. "One of them gave me a nine
inch
sausage."
Tenchi made a strangling noise.
*falls off chair*
You've been offered bigger sausages, I suppose. ^_^
"Even Ryouko was impressed by that. She said she wanted to try too,
but she
could only get seven inches down before she gagged."
Tenchi's heart began to fail.
"Aeka said that was nothing and got a nice, fat, juicy foot long one
down
in a single gulp. She said she was so good at it because of her
Juraian
bridal training. Who'd have thought they taught that sort of thing
in
bridal training, right, Tenchi? Tenchi?"
*Um, DB, you forgot to tag this one...* *gets hysterical*
It wouldn't fit in the subject line. Sorry.
Mihoshi suddenly realized that Tenchi had stopped breathing and
promptly
began giving him mouth-to-mouth resuscitation.
Forget 911. That's better
Heh.
*snip*
"Anyway, I don't want you to go
back there again."
Wow, he's telling her what to do? *looks around for the real Tenchi*
Heh. Actually had a couple people mention that. Could be he's developing a
certain attachment to someone. On the other hand, it could be just a bad
case of heartburn that's making him a little cranky.
*snip*
"Of course I can," Mihoshi said confidently. "But I won't go there
again.
If it makes you uncomfortable, it would make me uncomfortable and
then I
wouldn't have fun, and if I wouldn't have fun, there wouldn't be any
reason
for me to go."
Got away with it, did he? Hm.
Well, Mihoshi made sure to lay down the law by getting him to say she could
do whatever she wants. now she's giving him a consession too.
*snip*
Tenchi was about to ask her what the problem was as the rocks struck
one
another. A bright red-colored light formed where the rocks
contacted, then
a wave of heat knocked Tenchi unconscious.
*nods* *knew something like that was going to happen*
Oops. I'm becoming a but more predictable. Better come up with something
else unexpected then.
"Well, you were the one that wanted a fire going. I was just trying
to
help, and it's not like you got burned much."
"I see."
"I have a marker if you want to try and draw your eyebrows back on."
LOL!!!
*offers Tenchi some of Cologne's salve...oops, that's my story*
But a good one, though his his pride was burned worse than his body. His
eyebrows though, they were gonners.
fighting in my line of work. If I never saw two people arguing
again, it
would be all right with me."
"I see." That was a new insight on Mihoshi. Tenchi found the answer
simple,
but in this case the simplicity of it made it all the more poignant.
It
impressed him.
I like that. A lot.
Thanks. It made sense to me, especially given Mihoshi's nature. Glad it
sounded good.
*snip*
in my life. But I surprised everyone, even my instructors, by
graduating
with honors, in spite of everything they tried to do." With her
explanation
over, Mihoshi relaxed.
Once again, Tenchi found himself impressed by Mihoshi's intensity.
"It
looks like I underestimated you again. Sorry about that."
Very, very nice.
Again since there's virtually no background on her, it gives one a lot of
leeway in what to do with her past. Glad it worked for you.
*snip*
"Sorri Techi," Mihoshi slurred as she walked across him and into the
night
^Tenchi
Nope. She's slurring her words and dropped the 'n' when she said his name.
It was over in a second, as the
blade finished its cut and nearly severed Tenchi's opponent nearly
in half.
The world turned black for Ariana, and her last thoughts were of
Sa'bre,
and that she had failed the man she loved, for now there was no one
to warn
him of the unsuspecting dangers he faced at the hands of the boy.
And then there was nothing.
!!! Wow.
Eh? Wow about what? The suddeness of her death, or the semi-graphic nature
of it?
from
the body nearly being severed in half had splashed across the bottom
of his
outfit him, leaving an all too real reminder of what he had just
done. The
body of Mihoshi's attacker remained where it was, an unmoving sight
full of
gore. This time the body remained where it was.
Saying it twice seems sort of confusing.
Yeah. I'll get rid of one of them.
though him. Again he told himself it had to be done. It was a simple
choice
that the woman had forced him to make: his and Mihoshi's life or
hers.
Kagato had forced a similar one and the results had been the same.
Tenchi
was just going to have to live with what he had done, just like any
soldier
would on a battlefield. It wasn't easy, but it was a necessary
thing.
Very good explanation.
I already gave the explanation for that one in the reply to DF.
*snip*
"AHHH!" Mihoshi screamed as she hit him with a palm thrust that
connected
hard with his chin. She rolled out of his grasp and into a standing
position next to his stunned form. She gathered the top of her
uniform and
pulled it up to cover her revealed flesh. "I can't believe you did
that!
And I trusted you so much, Tenchi."
Saw that one coming, but I LIKE it
Cool. Although I'd be concerned if I were you, Kara. If you can start to
predict my actions, that might mean you're begining to think more like me.
Ask anyone; this is probably not a good thing. ^_^
"You didn't have to knock me out. If you wanted to have sex, all you
had to
do was ask."
Tenchi facefaulted. That proved both a mistake and wake up call at
the same
time.
Kara facefaults with Tenchi
Heh. Did it wake up a voice in your head too?
noise
come from the direction of the orb. For some odd reason, the smooth
surface
of the polynison had begun to retract, the top pulling back and
gathering
around the bottom. He stood transfixed as it continued opening until
the
top half had retracted and the contents within the orb could be
clearly
seen at last.
Uh oh
Yep. Only a statis field to go.
Mihoshi's reaction was to visibly pale as she fell to her knees in
shock at
the impossible image before her. There was only the faintest of
whispers
upon her lips, but it was loud enough for Tenchi to hear.
"Shihana."
eep
Yep. As you might have guessed. The end is coming soon. Not many people
left, and the Shihana is almost unleashed.
Sorry that one took so long to do. Serves me right for proudly
proclaiming
it would probably only take me two weeks to get it out. No
guarantees for
the next one
Make no promises, DB. When they email you, just say "I'm working on
it".
Just like telling your creditors that 'The check's in the mail.' Got you.
Seriously, I liked it - a lot.
Thanks. Glad you did. And thanks for the long C+C as well. I greatly
appreciate it.
D.B. Sommer