As others have said, this was a really nice shortfic.

However. I think the explanations at the end are unnecessary, and
detract from the fic. This kind of story, IMO, should stand on its own;
and I think it's better to take a chance on leaving people confused than
to come in and explicitly explain things.

Just my 2 yen here... :)


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html


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