While the idea of Ranma characters in 30-th
century Crystal Tokyo is attractive and original, this
isn't executed very well. I won't complain about
power level comparisions between R1/2 and SM
characters-your fic was reasonable enough-but just
as Allyn Yonge said, this fic is hard to read. And
another attribute that bothered me was the fic's
tempo; everything seemed so RUSHED.
You have got something here that could be good,
but at this state it has too many rough edges for me
to enjoy.
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