DB Sommer wrote:
Since the focal point is Ryouko's defection, it does sort of lose it at the
end. Up to that point, everything had seemed well thought out and actually
flowed well, but that part of the end just cut it. Not sure how you could
change it to make it work, though.
The real problem as I see it, is that Ryoko just wouldn't be interested in being
a "disciple". She already has loads of personal power and hasn't had time or reason
to be tempted. It might work better if she just made the straight out deal;
Paladine becomes emperor and she gets Tenchi and Jurai.