Somewhat improved over your first effort. I'm only going to comment on the
grammar and spelling mistakes, because frankly, the story itself leaves
little to comment on.

One foggy day on October 31st , blood was found at the begining of the

If you have to begin with an opening like this, try 'One foggy Halloween'.
It sounds slightly better.

Spelling lesson:

beginning


Forbidden

Forest.As soon as school ended,Squirtle,Pikachu,and Oddish waited for

You need to put spaces between the punctuation mark and the next word.
Example:

Forest. As soon as school ended, Squirtle, Pikachu, and Oddish

everyone to

go.They were going on an adventure.They were going to find out what was

going on!!!

Three exclamation points is excessive. One will do.

     There was an uproar between the olddest Pokemon in the forest.

Strange happenings

were taking place there, and no one knew who or what was causing it.

'Oldest' only has one 'd'. Also, if there are more than two of these
'oldest Pokemon', then the proper word is 'among', not 'between'.

      When the sun went down, the three of them heard an earsplitting

scream. It was time

for them to sneak out to investigate. So they each grabbed

sleeping-bags, snacks, walkie-

'sleeping bags' is not hyphenated.

talkies, and flash-lights that shone a different colors so they could

Neither is 'flashlights'. It's a single word. Also, you don't need the 'a'
between 'shone' and 'different'. 'a' denotes a singular noun; 'colors' is
plural.

" Are you crazy, the Dark Lord lives that way. You will be killed in
matter of seconds!"Dratini

Here, on the other hand, you *need* an 'a', as 'matter' is a singular noun.

        As they approached the forest, their intestines were getting

tangled in a knot, and their

hearts were summersaulting wildly. They had first decided to go

Spelling lesson:

somersaulting

blood dribbling from it�s snout. They knew right away it was the Dark

its

         Pikachu bravely took out his flashlight and flashed at the

Lord, dazzling him. Squirtle

tied his feet together, the creature roared in fury, as he fell to the

ground with a loud bump. At

the same time Oddish came running in with the jar of mosquitoes,

tripped which caused him

to land on the Dark Lord.

You have a few run-ons and other messy sentence structure problems here. I
recommend reading this paragraph out loud to yourself. You should be able
to find the most glaring of the errors.

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What kind of Pokemon are you?
How do you do the things you do?
Share with me your secrets deep inside...
What kind of Pokemon are you?
Are you loyal through and through?
And do you have a heart that's true?
What kind of Pokemon are you?

The Eternal Lost Lurker
(The Pokemon under the skirt of the girl...)
lurkerdrome@megami.net

"Pokemon, getto daze!"