At 10:20 PM 8/3/99 +0000, you wrote:

Overall, good chapter. The writing coveyed the right atmosphere, and the
character emotions were well-handled.

        Thanks! ^_^

Cologne probably shouldn't pray to the Kami; the Chinese have their own
gods (and it's possible that the Amazons have yet others).

        Well, I was just using Kami as a generic reference, there. Sorry
about that.

Ranma's being exceptionally stupid. "Okay, I wanna kill this guy, so
I'll go to a public place where people will see the two of us together
first." Of course, that's not necessarily OOC for him. It might be that
he's subconsciously trying to get caught; or he might be just
exhibiting, well, exceptional stupidity. ^_^

        Actually, as I imagined it, Ranma is in a crowd of people who have
never seen him before, and don't even know what Jusenkyou is. If anyone
asks, Taki left with a red-haired girl that nobody knew. But, would you have
any suggestions? I do agree that there is room for improvement.

Keep it up; looking forward to more of this.

        Oh, I will! ^_^ Thanks for writing, adn I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Jed