It's been a while since I have read this, so forgive me if I forget a few
things.

the forest fire in

the area, I had gone to see what I could do to help, and that was where
I found your body."

'body' makes Ranma sound like he was dead. Maybe 'I found you.' works
better

Ranma flopped back down on the bed.  After a moment of lying ther,

there.

You know, that's a pretty basic spelling mistake. That NeW-B, guy wouldn't
have do something basic like that. ^_^

the

he

got up again, anger evident in his eyes.  "What the hell happened last
night?

Genkai: (sniffling) You don't remember? You said you loved me.

she knew that this boy needed to know certain things in order to be
prepared.  "It is not entirely true that it is the greatest of the
assassin arts.  There are a few other arts that held that distinction on
certain points in history.  One of those arts was the nekoken."

And so is the usagi-kyaku. Don't forget that one. It is incredibly
dangerous as well.

"T-The nekoken?" Ranma stuttered, his distress rising at the mentioning
of it.

"Yes, I do believe you are familiar with it.  The lone practitioner of
an art feared and long forgotten except by a certain old perverted
coot.  Don't be surprised.  I've known your master for quite some time
now.  I can't believe how your father managed to steal the manuscript

>from him."

Bribed Happi with a pair of panties?

"You know my Pop, too?" Ranma asked, various

asked. Various

Happi had been prepared to teach everything he knew too.  I don't know
whether to say it was unfortunate when he decided to give up this prize
for your mother.  The ambition that once burned so brightly in him, he
in the blink of an eye decided to move onto you."

"He taught me the nekoken on purpose?" Ranma asked, putting the little
bits of facts Genkai told him together.

Duh. Did Ranma think Genma was throwing him in the pit by accident?

"When I get my hands on him..."

"The nekoken was the most prized of all of the ancient martial arts
techniques that Happi had in his possession," Genkai interrupted the
angry Ranma.  "The temptation was too great for your father who wanted

'father, who'  I think

you to take his place as heir to the Anything Goes School.  It was
probably the biggest mistake of his life.  For with that single act of
teaching you the move, he drew the attention of the current master of
the dark shotokan arts, Goki."

"The man that Ryu had fought against," Ranma said mainly to himself.
The person that had bested the now demonized Ryu.  Were Ranma was to

drop 'was'

Genkai could see that her words had no effect on the boy whatsoever.
The impulsiveness of the young.

And doubly so in Ranma.

full power of this

ancient art."

"I can beat him without using stupid c-cats," Ranma said confidently.

If he's saying it confidently, why did he stutter?

The sound of a fight sounded

Eh? That doesn't work. Maybe. 'A fight sounded

 just about perfect right now to Ranma.

His anger at himself for failing to save Sakura was still fresh in his
mind and he needed to blow off a little steam.

* * * * *

Vega raised his head slightly to look at the screen number forty four.

numbered

"Names?"

"Barry Horowitz and Ranma Saotome," his butler replied quickly.

Barry Horowitz? BWAHHAHAHAHA!!! Ranma gets to fight a jobber. Okay, except
for one PPV win over Chris 'don't call me Skip' Candido. Maybe Ranma
should learn the 'Pat myself On The Back' move Horowitz uses.

* * * * *

"So, what you

what are you

"Thank-you, Yukina," Genkai

Yukina." Genkai

"Yeah, I had such a wonderful dream about Mamo-chan, too," Mini-Usagi
added.

"It was you!?  Stop having them!" Ranma yelled

hehehehe.

Mini-Moiraine sighed and gave a pat on his hand to show that she will

would

do as he asked but kept the cross look so that he also knew that she
wasn't happy with it.

"Uh, can you keep it a secret from Moiraine?  I don't think she'd be
too happy if she knew about this," Ranma said.  Out of the Moiraine,

drop 'the'

Mini-Urd scowled as she looked at the two scrubs.  *I could be cute to

too


awkward to move with

the four weights handcuffed to his wrists and ankles.  The weight

weights

themselves were not much of a problem as he could lift a small boulder
if he had too

to

 with the training he had undergone.

He could remember how he had scoffed at his pop the first time he had
done this sort of training.  The weight distribution had been
inconsistent so it did not really help much in building up his body as
his pop had hoped.  Not for the first time on this trip, he missed the
crazy ideas and company of the older Saotome.  Neither of them were big
on touchy feely stuff, but at times the big lug did genuinely care for
him, Ranma knew.

Nice to see Ranma admit that.

is at the top physical condition."

"Then what are we doing here?"

"I going

I am going

to kill you and you are going to stop me."

Hopefully not in that order.

"What..." Ranma barely uttered the word out before Genkai launched
herself at him with a deceptive speed her old appearance gave no
indication of.

Agh! That's damn awkward. I can't quite figure out how to reword it
though.

The woman quickly got under his guard as his encumbered

arms were not fast enough to stop her.  He grunted as he felt a sharp
pain in his abdomen.  She was also strong her

strong for her

Ranma winced and knew what a fool he had been even as he through

threw

his

first punch in this one sided

one-sided

 battle.  Predictably, his weighted arm

didn't even come close to the old woman before he saw her image blur

>from his sight and another searing pain erupted in his stomach.  The

pendulous swings of the ball on the chains counteracted his momentary
surprise attack as they fought against the momentum of his speeding
fist.

In other words, time to ditch the weights. Of course she won't give him
the time to do it, though.

* * * * *

"Oh, that's got to hurt," Mini-Urd said, adverting

averting

 her eyes.  She found

Mini-Usagi cowering below her not

her, not

*That little brat.  After all the things I taught her... hey, come to
think of it, it's my fault.  I _did_ teach her this stuff,* Mini-Urd
suddenly recalled.  Pride at this little fact warred against her anger
for a moment.

Hehehe.


silent one.  Whether

she grew into a demon or and

an

not saved her... she shuddered.  She would still be a puppet of that
evil megalomaniac.  Ever since that day, she had taken showers every day

two 'day's. I'd change this to. Ever since then, she had taken showers
every day


encounters his

better, he can not help but want to level the field, like our battle
today.  The Anything Goes style should have been long destroyed

drop 'long'

 along

with the art his friend Ryu had fallen prey to."

"He seems okay right now."

"It only takes one memorable fight to spark him and he will be lost.
Such is the case with anyone that takes on the mentality created by
following the way of Anything Goes.  If I were to say

drop 'say'

nice work.

D.B. Sommer