In a message dated 6/28/99 7:59:30 AM Pacific Daylight Time, Kenjiko2@AOL.COM 
writes:

It's not done yet-- but since part 11 is taking so bloody long I'm posting 

a 

 teaser (sort of) to the list.  So, what'cha think?  
 
 kenko

I think a couple of 4 things.  1)  Akanes "challenge" costume reads like its 
based more on Shampoo's normal mode of dress than Ranma (Reguardless if its 
male or female)  2) You need to decide if your going to use Commas, elipisis, 
or dashes to indicate pauses in speech and use just the one consistently.  
You mixed the three ways in this chapter and I found it confusing.  3)  I 
wanna see some fan art depicting these outfits!  (Ranma in her leathers, 
Akanes fighting uniform and the various cast in their costumes!)  4)  WRITE 
FASTER!!!  OG WANT SEE REST OF PARTY!!!

Ahem.  Sorry about that last point, my cruder nature got out of line.  Still, 
I can't wait to see the rest of this.