as a way of life so many years ago.  *I hope that Ranma can avoid the 
same mistakes that I did not.  The last thing that my son needs in his 

This sounds bad enough for me to notice even when *not* in editing mode. :-)
The point is that he isn't avoiding the same mistakes - because Genma
*didn't* avoid them. Scratch "same"; that flows much better.

...

Woohoo. Not much else to say in term of specific comments. What I would
say about this series is that beyond the excellent *writing*, it is not
as much good, or exciting, or engaging, as it is *interesting*. The
plot (which so far feels very vague and not really moving much) seems
more like a medium for exploring the setting(s) than anything else
else. Usually, I do not much like this type of story, but here it works
well (and the elaborate writing style suits it very well, whereas it
might feel to big and in the way in another type of fic), and I can't
wait to find out more!

And I must say your output rate is most impressive. :-)


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Ronny Hedin, thark@hem2.passagen.se, http://nabiki.newberry.edu/thark/
                    "Momomoto, famous japanese, can swallow his nose."