At 08:21 PM 3/5/99 -0800, you wrote:

HI,
Interesting and well done as usual. Nice dialog and description. 
However there doesn't seem much room for conflict or development.
Powerful/unbeatable martial artist. . . Death and destruction. But why

conlfict man vs himself i think this would be.. and theres alot that can be
done here.. as they attempt to help Ranma lead a normal life..

does anybody care??? So far Ranma is not a likeable character.

not all characters are likeable.. and can u really say that Ranma is a
likeable character? he's an arrogant prick for the most part.. 

Extremely dangerous. You might be able to build on past associations
between Soun/Genma but that is going to take a great deal of
development. (Convence Soun to keep a homicidal maniac AND a gajin
woman in his house AND his 'old friend' with his three daughters???) I

this is Soun.. all he has to do is cure Ranma of his homicidal tendencies
and the Dojo will be secure!!!

feel there needs to be some way to CONNECT Ranma with someone or
something else. And what is the Amazon's motivation for helping? This
is not clear to me on first reading.  Nor is it going to be easy to
develop any sympathy for Ranma as a character. I like the idea and I
look forward to seeing more. I do NOT envy you. This looks like an
extremely difficult story to develop and finish.

what's Shampoo's motivation? why very easy.. if she can find a cure for
it.. then the Amazons will know it.. and since they obviously are scared of
what the berserker state can do.. why  not try to cure all of them?
besides.. if a cure works.. Shampoo might just get herself a husband... 



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