At 03:59 PM 12/17/98 EST, AlphSailor@aol.com scrawled:
 >> In a message dated 12/17/98 11:44:46 AM, hibiki_ryouga wrote:
 >> 
 >> >Well, I figured it was finally time for me to post something, although
 >> >this has probably been done before. This is my first fic, and honest C&C
 >> >is appreciated. It will help ensure that I write better things from now
 >> >on :)

*snip*

 >> Don't get me wrong, you did good job, but in my opinion, this fanfic was a
 >> poor choice as first fanfic to be posted, because first fanfics usually gives
 >> the reader the first impression of what to expect from the author later on. I
 >> could be wrong, of course.
 >> Finishing off Senshi is *not* a good way to begin your fanfic carreer. Try for
 >> more lighter note, rather than going for death-fics (which is IMHO, the

*snip*

Anou, I thought this was supposed to be a parody of Highlander.  It was
brief and amusing.  "There can only be one."  Would you have liked it better
if it had a spamfic or parody tag?

As for me, I don't have as much time as I used to, so for new authors, I tend
to read shortfics, spamfics, or oneshots.  This was an ideal way to get my
attention.  I love humorous 'fics so I'll be looking forward to anything else this
author posts.

 >> Overall, with the fic being short and all, I really can't comment on your
 >> writing style. The content seems to be too brief to be of any interest, and
 >> the theme of killing senshi off already has been done to death.

When the 'fic is this brief, I don't take it very seriously (unless it's one of those
character pieces or a vignette.

A little C&C to follow.

 >> In a message dated 12/17/98 11:44:46 AM, hibiki_ryouga wrote:

*snip*

 >>         "Well," Artemis began, "You know all those times you died and
 >> were
 >> ressurected? It wasn't the ginzuishou that did it."

"resurrected"  

And maybe, "It wasn't the ginzuishou that brought you back."

 >>         "What was it then?"
 >>         "You may want to sit down for this," said Luna. "And afterwards,
 >> there
 >> is something you will all need to do, and it won't be easy on any of
 >> us."

I know they're trying to beat around the bush, but this slows down the 'fic.
Maybe Luna should come right out and say that they will have to do 
something distasteful.

*snip*

 >>                 End (and there was much rejoicing)

Monty Python reference?

Venkarel
(going on vacation tomorrow)