On Fri, 20 Nov 1998, Jason Liao wrote:

Hey, Donny!

Hi!

Y'know, I've seen so many Ranma WAFFs that I don't even bother to read
most of them now.  So why read this?  Partially because I seem to like
Ranma and Nabiki WAFFs for some unknown reason.  But I think it also stems
from your style, where you execute the "show, don't tell" principle very
well. 

LIke Nabiki WAFFy fics myself ^_^

There may be some errors that I missed, since I'm procrastinating in my
Digital Logic homework right now.  In general, I noticed the following.

1)	a tendency to repeat words in close proximity.
2)	periods, when there should be question marks.
3)	past/present/perfect tenses.

It might be worthwhile to glance over what you've written with these
points in mind.

Thanks for the C & C and I will look it over again.  I usually send fics
on the fly, but I should really stop that bad habit.

On Thu, 19 Nov 1998, Donny Cheng wrote:

she got comfortable.  This caused various interesting parts of her body
to touch his very interested body in many interesting ways.

You used "interested" three times in this sentence.

That I actually did on purpose. ^_^