From: "Chris Tendo" <ayiekie@hotmail.com>
To: fanfic@fanfic.com
Subject: [FFML] [FANFIC][RANMA][2/2] The ties That Bind, Part 5
Date: Mon, 05 Oct 1998 11:45:23 PDT

TO BE CONTINUED...

Author�s notes: Well, that�s it.  Part five is finally done, and now my 
baby�s diverged enough from the manga that I feel safe to release it. 

Ahh.  I was wondering about why you used the "mass dump" approach.
 

As always, all comments and criticisms are welcome!  Send them to
the list or ayiekie@hotmail.com, SVP.

As for commentary.... My God.  This is absolutely fantastic!  And you've 
done a masterful job of _not_ favoring "Panma" over Ranma.  The balance 
is perfect.

Nabiki is shaping up to be much nastier in this version and that's 
probably the biggest OOC complaint I might make.  It's not so much that 
she never acts like this, as that this side of her personality doesn't 
really show up until much later in the source continuity.

For instance, at the beginning of the Manga, she seems mostly to indulge 
in idle gossip with her classmates, and doesn't realize until later on, 
after continued exposure to Ranma, the profit potential of 
information--You have her running a micro-Yakuza operation right from 
the start.

There were a few grammar/spelling errors (more of the latter, actually), 
but nothing too horrible, or too frequent.

I am definitely looking forward to the next part, as well as hoping to 
see what other changes you've wrought.  You should try to give us some 
idea of when "Panma" was adopted by Genma (I'm assuming that's what 
happened), so that we can anticipate some of the future changes.

I'm sure Ryouga and Shampoo will both prove to be very interesting in 
this version.

--Freemage

Special thanks to Andy Kent (Avatar) for help with the last Nabiki
scene.




















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"He'd been an angel once. He hadn't meant to Fall.
He'd just hung around with the wrong people."
Crowley, Good Omens





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