Remember, the key rule for any dialogue is Short and Sweet. This isn't a 
matter of taste, this a rule of story-telling.. The best fanfic authors 
don't do it, and neither do any published writers.

Bull.  I *am* a published writer, of both fiction and non-fiction: books,
magazine articles and short stories.  Dialogue style is dictated by two
factors:  the needs of the story, and the personality of the character
speaking.  I've written characters who were so laconic as to be mute, and
others who spoke in paragraph-long run-on sentences -- and both were
*correct*, as determined by who they were and what they needed to say.

By this fallacious metric, you would encourage us to "improve" Hamlet's
soliloquy to "Kill myself or not?  I can't decide," and declare the
result art.

I think not.

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