I'm doing this as an overview type c&c because... well... the smart 
quotes f*cked up when I tried to do a basic reply.

Overall:  Well thought out, a couple interesting plot twists in there.  
Specifically, the power failure and Kodachi in-and-of-herself.  You 
leave me wanting more, that's mean.  Of course, who am I to talk?
  Aside from a couple formatting or usage errors, I couldn't find much 
wrong with it.

Nitpicks:

1)Get RID of the smart quotes... please!
2) (During the Akane/Kodachi fight scene) I noticed this line and it 
bugged me.  "She was acting worse injured than she really was."
3) It may be my mail reader, but directly after Kodachi left Ranma's lab 
there were the following lines.

<text I accidentally snipped>
I
<more text>

Something seems off here.

Miscellaneous junk:
Was that a small homage to Dune there with Shampoo-neko.  I can't be 
sure because you didn't use the exact words but...

"I must not fear, for fear is the mind killer.  Fear is the little death 
that brings total annihilation.  I must control my fear, and allow it to 
pass over me, and through me.  I must not fear."

I'm fairly certain I got it wrong but I think those were the words the 
Paul Atreides was thinking during the 'The Box' sequence.

Anyone with direct access to the movie or the book may feel free to 
correct me on this.

The scene involving Shampoo just seemed familiar in that respect.

Good job, keep 'em comin'.

"Let's get rid of the semi-colons; nobody uses them anyway."
   -Wally (It was written EXACTLY like this too)

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Brian, singing off...

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