"Not every fairy tale has an happy ending."

And a sad ending may have been what this fic needed. You had a very

good

buildup, but the ending was a let down. Look, I wanted Belldandy to

live as

much as you do, but the way you went about it was... disappointing.

it

lacked the emotional impact.
Unless you can rewrite the ending for better impact, you may have to

let

Belldandy die.
Looking forward to reading the completed version of this fic.

	Perhaps a bit more strife in the end, but killing Belldandy... seems a
bit excessive.  Note: Killing Belldandy pales in comparison to keeping
her alive, but separating her from Keiichi.  There are other ways to
make an unhappy ending than killing the protagonist.

Adam Christopher Leigh
Omicron@sprynet.com